I wish you could see me right now.
Because, only you would have noticed the details on my face.
Only you.
If you would have, you would have noticed my lips before anything else.
And I would have seen the most honest smile of yours, as if you're proud of them.
Or a naughty smile, about the thoughts of eating them already.
Either this, or you would have asked "You used a lip color, didn't you?"
And grinned about it.
You would have noticed my smile and would have said, "It's nothing in comparison to the smile you gave me in the room. That was the widest."
You would have noticed my teeth and smiled.
You would have noticed my hair. And like always, removed the band and loosened my curls.
You would have ruffled them, pushed a few strands of my hair on my face and then slowly tucked them behind my ear getting all romantic.
You would have noticed my dangling earrings and admired them. You would have even bent down a bit to kiss me below my right ear.
Or perhaps, you would have just noticed the extra kohl in my eyes today.
And in a closer look, realized, it's smudged.
And then noticed the dried tears on the cheeks...
U blogd aftr soooo long n trust me this 1 was wrth waiting for...just awsome. It can perfectly relate wit every girl who's ever been in love....
ReplyDeleteSo happy to know it was worth your wait! I actually took long.. Abhi jaldi jaldi pakka :D
DeleteAnd yes, every girl experiences these moments, in real or in dreams..
Thank you! :)
very touching thoughts of youngerone .
ReplyDeleteThank you uncle! :)
DeleteAftr reading all ur blogs was eagerly waiting fr d next one and here it is...
ReplyDeleteN its really awesome...u seriously are a vry keen observer n then pen it down beautifully...
There is so much of originality in ur stories...and a deep connection...love it..
Keep writing...
Seeing your comment makes me feel so happy!
DeleteIt means a lot to have all these compliments come from you.
Thank you sooo much Priyank! :D
And definitely! :)
There is nothing different but still it is different. The way of expressing makes it different. It was wonderfully written. You are amazing. Love you for this. Keep going. :)
ReplyDeleteRash!! Love you too! Thank you! :) :*
Delete:) I'm sure all of us can relate.
ReplyDeleteWelcome back!
:) Thank you Tan!
Deletebeautifully written Priyanka!!
ReplyDeleteTrust me every girl in love in a true manner can surely relate to this! :)
:) :) thank you so much Neha!
Deletevery nicely expressed.Priyanka!!!!
ReplyDeleteThank you, Nitvin!
DeleteWelcome to the blog! :)
Do you even know how much I admire the way you express things. Every line is a "detailed" expression of the action one performs as you wrote. Like I could imagine. Love this one!
ReplyDelete:) :)
DeleteI am overwhelmed, sweetheart! Thank you co much! :D
Pri misssed reading ut blogs. But its awesome. Wish in real nor in dreams you have a tear in your eye ever.love u
ReplyDeleteHugssss
Aww Khushboo! :') Thank you for waiting and for such a wonderful wish!
DeleteTighter hugs. More love. :*
awesome it is..!! bahot sahi hai pri..! :*
ReplyDeleteDish!! Thank you jaaneman! :*
DeleteJust in love with the character. Makes me feel engrossed.
ReplyDeleteAnd the last line... oh what I wouldn't give to read it for the first time... over and over again
Mission accomplished! :P
DeleteWhat joy it brings to me knowing that I got you so involved. A writer's work is done there. :)
And thank you so much! Glad that you liked it so much. Thank you for mentioning about the last line too. :D
After I read all the blogs and finally this one. I am jst waiting anxiously for the nxt 1. this is one of the bst stories I had ever heard about couple's!!.. uh, it's too good
ReplyDeleteSo just waitin for d nxt blog
hope you remember me jinu
Of course I remember you! Thank you Jinu!
DeleteKeep reading and commenting! :D
TOO GOOD ... its awesome..
ReplyDeleteafter reading I felt that every word in this post has very deep meaning......
I appreciate your thoughts..
keep writing.. :D
Thanks a lot Tushar! Welcome to the blog! :D
DeleteKeep reading and commenting! :)
beautifully expressed...with deep feelings!
ReplyDeletekeep it up dea :)
Thank you Noopur! :)
DeleteThe end, for me, brought it all together. Has potential for a mini-series. Take the story somewhere else from here.
ReplyDelete:)
DeleteI will definitely think of something to continue this!
No one word can praise it enough...
ReplyDeleteHi there Harshal! Thank you for your kind words. :)
DeleteExceptional!
ReplyDelete:D Thank you Abhas!
DeleteAmazing..words are truly written from your heart.����
ReplyDeleteThank you for reading and commenting, Lakshya! So glad you liked it. :)
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